My First Track!

My First Track!
Posted on: 22.11.2012 by Carlee Pickard
Hey guys,

Just wanted to share my first track I ever created. Hope you guys enjoy it, and all feedback is welcome - positive & criticism. I definitely appreciate both, and if you criticize it please tell me how you believe I could improve it!

Thanks!


https://soundcloud.com/djkunals/celebrations
Carlee Pickard
26.11.2012
Originally Posted by Volpe
Maybe just start the track with like 8 bars of drums and then slowly start the build. And the panning is a matter of taste i guess
Ahh i'll do that next time . Thanks!
Carlee Pickard
26.11.2012
Originally Posted by Eric Day
Overall, it's actually a pretty good jam for a first go. The break from 1:20-1:50 seems a little flat, maybe play with it a little to make it more dynamic. I dug the sound(s) you used for the build directly following that part.
Ahh, I agree completely. Do you have any suggestions to add dynamics? I mean I know i'll work on the levels maybe and bringing in sounds here and there, but any specific advice would be greatly appreciated!

Originally Posted by Volpe
not really my genre but it sounded pretty solid to me.
the beginnig is a little harsh, a small intro is never wrong i guess.
and the bulid-up starting at 1:50 has too much of this stereo-left-right-swapping-thingy ( i dont know what the technical term is but i guess you get what i mean) for my taste. not saying it shouldnt have any but the sound should never be completely on either side imo.
otherwise good job, keep it up
The intro do you believe would be better without the build and just the regular drums going? As for the stereo moving from left to right (it's called panning ), the reason behind that was I was trying to give it like a feel of a tornado in a club. Like if you're standing in the middle of the dance floor the sound goes around and around in an increasing rate.

Thank you guys for your feedback!
Carlee Pickard
24.11.2012
Originally Posted by scamo
Forget what I meant in that sentence. Just try to come up with more of a melody and use the arpeggios to enhance the melody.

scamo
Ahh, perfect, I shall try my best to do that!

Thank You!
Carlee Pickard
24.11.2012
Originally Posted by enorjy
Im guessing this is some type of trance. I liked it
Haha yeah I wanted it to be trance, but then I guess it's now progressive trance maybe? And thank you!

Originally Posted by scamo
Overall, ok. The arpaggiated synth is a bit over cooked. But other than, not bad for a first track. The arpaggiated synth is a matter of taste too. There are hits out there where I believe there is too much of that in the track.

scamo
Ahh I gotcha, I was wondering what do you mean by the bolded part? And I definitely appreciate the feedback, once I understand that part i'll definitely try tweaking sounds here and there and hopefully you'll like the next one more! Thanks for the feedback scamo!

Originally Posted by Limbo
Pretty god for a first song, really liked the melody, but you could work on the sounds a bit, they seem somewhat a bit noisy But yeah overall very nice, keep up the good work!
When you say noisy, do you mean overbearing on the ears? Could you please describe it a bit more? Should I have EQ'd out frequencies to make like the sounds more clear or something? And thank you so much for your feedback! Glad you enjoyed it!
Carlee Pickard
22.11.2012
Hey guys,

Just wanted to share my first track I ever created. Hope you guys enjoy it, and all feedback is welcome - positive & criticism. I definitely appreciate both, and if you criticize it please tell me how you believe I could improve it!

Thanks!


https://soundcloud.com/djkunals/celebrations
Carlee Pickard
26.11.2012
Originally Posted by Volpe
Maybe just start the track with like 8 bars of drums and then slowly start the build. And the panning is a matter of taste i guess
Ahh i'll do that next time . Thanks!
Margaretta Hebenstreit
26.11.2012
Maybe just start the track with like 8 bars of drums and then slowly start the build. And the panning is a matter of taste i guess
Carlee Pickard
26.11.2012
Originally Posted by Eric Day
Overall, it's actually a pretty good jam for a first go. The break from 1:20-1:50 seems a little flat, maybe play with it a little to make it more dynamic. I dug the sound(s) you used for the build directly following that part.
Ahh, I agree completely. Do you have any suggestions to add dynamics? I mean I know i'll work on the levels maybe and bringing in sounds here and there, but any specific advice would be greatly appreciated!

Originally Posted by Volpe
not really my genre but it sounded pretty solid to me.
the beginnig is a little harsh, a small intro is never wrong i guess.
and the bulid-up starting at 1:50 has too much of this stereo-left-right-swapping-thingy ( i dont know what the technical term is but i guess you get what i mean) for my taste. not saying it shouldnt have any but the sound should never be completely on either side imo.
otherwise good job, keep it up
The intro do you believe would be better without the build and just the regular drums going? As for the stereo moving from left to right (it's called panning ), the reason behind that was I was trying to give it like a feel of a tornado in a club. Like if you're standing in the middle of the dance floor the sound goes around and around in an increasing rate.

Thank you guys for your feedback!
Margaretta Hebenstreit
25.11.2012
not really my genre but it sounded pretty solid to me.
the beginnig is a little harsh, a small intro is never wrong i guess.
and the bulid-up starting at 1:50 has too much of this stereo-left-right-swapping-thingy ( i dont know what the technical term is but i guess you get what i mean) for my taste. not saying it shouldnt have any but the sound should never be completely on either side imo.
otherwise good job, keep it up
Iluminada Gallelli
25.11.2012
Overall, it's actually a pretty good jam for a first go. The break from 1:20-1:50 seems a little flat, maybe play with it a little to make it more dynamic. I dug the sound(s) you used for the build directly following that part.
Carlee Pickard
24.11.2012
Originally Posted by scamo
Forget what I meant in that sentence. Just try to come up with more of a melody and use the arpeggios to enhance the melody.

scamo
Ahh, perfect, I shall try my best to do that!

Thank You!
Rey Holubar
24.11.2012
Forget what I meant in that sentence. Just try to come up with more of a melody and use the arpeggios to enhance the melody.

scamo
Carlee Pickard
24.11.2012
Originally Posted by enorjy
Im guessing this is some type of trance. I liked it
Haha yeah I wanted it to be trance, but then I guess it's now progressive trance maybe? And thank you!

Originally Posted by scamo
Overall, ok. The arpaggiated synth is a bit over cooked. But other than, not bad for a first track. The arpaggiated synth is a matter of taste too. There are hits out there where I believe there is too much of that in the track.

scamo
Ahh I gotcha, I was wondering what do you mean by the bolded part? And I definitely appreciate the feedback, once I understand that part i'll definitely try tweaking sounds here and there and hopefully you'll like the next one more! Thanks for the feedback scamo!

Originally Posted by Limbo
Pretty god for a first song, really liked the melody, but you could work on the sounds a bit, they seem somewhat a bit noisy But yeah overall very nice, keep up the good work!
When you say noisy, do you mean overbearing on the ears? Could you please describe it a bit more? Should I have EQ'd out frequencies to make like the sounds more clear or something? And thank you so much for your feedback! Glad you enjoyed it!
Tonita Rasool
23.11.2012
Pretty god for a first song, really liked the melody, but you could work on the sounds a bit, they seem somewhat a bit noisy But yeah overall very nice, keep up the good work!
Rey Holubar
23.11.2012
Overall, ok. The arpaggiated synth is a bit over cooked. But other than, not bad for a first track. The arpaggiated synth is a matter of taste too. There are hits out there where I believe there is too much of that in the track.

scamo
Rochel Papillion
22.11.2012
Im guessing this is some type of trance. I liked it

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